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Philly Story "first Draft" "opening Scene"

I have plans for this one. It has real potential. Don't steal my shit.
Michael P 10/25/20

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Starts off with dopeboys standing on a corner in Philly selling to the people on the street.*** The neighborhood is dilapidated.** Homeless people flood the streets.** Tents are all over the streets.** People are shooting up on the sidewalk.***

A car pulls up and grabs two of the dealers and kidnaps them.**** They are put in a car and driven to an undisclosed location in Pennsylvania.** The masks come off and they see a room full of rivals.*** One of them starts running their mouth at them.** They laugh and proceed to get to work.***

The main one says
"Since you like to run your fucking mouth I'm going to let you live"

He takes out a rusty dull box cutter and grabs his friends tongue with pliers. Since there was resistance he had his teeth broken in the with the needle nose of the tool.*** They grab his tongue from his mouth that continues to bleed and slowly cuts the bottle connection of the tongue and lifts it at the same time ripping the muscle from the bottom of the mouth.*** The man screams in pain but the sounds are muffled from the inability to make coherent sounds from the blade and plies in his mouth.**

The friend screams
"What the fuck are you doing to him"
They laugh in response.** After the remove the connection from the base of his mouth they take his tongue and nails it half way into a wood board.*** With a slightly sharper blade they take the wood as far back as it will go.** When it's fully extended they cut off as much of the muscle as they could while laughing at the other man chained up who is freaking out.** After they finish they laugh and tell him that's just the beginning.**

They start removing pieces of him such as eyes, finger nails and fingers.*** The man is beyond tears and looks at his partner with a look of defeat in his eyes.*** After this they start to beat the man in the face with the claw end of the hammer.*** The final blow is in his one function eye.** The claw catches the bone in the oribital.** He finally dies after the hammer is swiftly pulled back removing the bones from his face.**

The friend is now in hysterics.**
After rubbing his hair and the side of his face with the bloody hammer they tell him
"If you would have kept your fucking mouth shut your friend would have lived"

"We didn't want you dead anyway, how else would we get our message across. We want you to spread the word to your piece of shit people.* THAT BLOCK IS OUR BLOCK, THIS WAS A KINDNESS IN OUR PART.** FROM NOW ON WE WON'T BE AS NICE"

Another man in the room says

"We will leave you a little something"

He takes the hammer and smashes all of his teeth out in 1 shot.** After this he is injected with a tranquilizer and dropped off on his block.**
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Re: Philly Story "first Draft" "opening Scene"

sounds like kensington :) been there
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