[S. Michael Simms]

Copyright 2018
by SMS

NOTHING NEW


What good are all the lashes
We endure beneath the sun?
Another generation passes
While a "new" one has begun.

But the sun still rises,
And the sun goes down,
Bringing with it no suprises
As it hurries back around.

As the water falling splashes
Into where the rivers run,
On the shore a new wave crashes;
Storms unleash on everyone.

And the wind still rises,
But the wind dies down,
And there still are no surprises
When it hurries back around.

[S. Michael Simms]

If you're going to one-star a thread in here, at least have the balls to leave a critique.

[S. Michael Simms]

Or not. Fucking coward.

[S. Michael Simms]

Oh, it's just you. Never mind.

[Heavy]

Here’s my critique.
The elements of this earth and in the story you tell exist, they do not have bad intentions. They are not unjust. They just are.
The human in his small mind and short time spent enduring the elements, believes he must hurry. Why?
Hurry, hurry, Die.

[S. Michael Simms]

Originally Posted by Heavy ↗

Here’s my critique.
The elements of this earth and in the story you tell exist, they do not have bad intentions. They are not unjust. They just are.
The human in his small mind and short time spent enduring the elements, believes he must hurry. Why?
Hurry, hurry, Die.

Yes. All is vanity and a chasing after wind.

[Suicide_Note]

Originally Posted by Analsmith ↗

If you're going to one-star a thread in here, at least have the balls to leave a critique.

I didn't one-star the thread. Eating a thread hasn't worked for me in at least 6 months. Critique? Sure. What you wrote was akin to something the average 7th grader would write. Nothing interesting, insightful, and certainly nothing original.

[S. Michael Simms]

Originally Posted by Suicide_Note ↗

I didn't one-star the thread. Eating a thread hasn't worked for me in at least 6 months. Critique? Sure. What you wrote was akin to something the average 7th grader would write. Nothing interesting, insightful, and certainly nothing original.

Thanks. Your detailed analysis and constructive assessment will allow me to improve my skills as a writer.

cri·tique
/kriˈtēk/

noun
1.
a detailed analysis and assessment of something, especially a literary, philosophical, or political theory.

[Moloko]

I didn't know this was DeviantArt?

Shame Anal isn't here still (or is he?) because I would have been delighted to have informed him that I rated his thread one star without reading his poem.

[SimoneFlen']

Originally Posted by MolokoPlusVellocet ↗

I didn't know this was DeviantArt?

Shame Anal isn't here still (or is he?) because I would have been delighted to have informed him that I rated his thread one star without reading his poem.

You're not the only one. I'm the one he was whinging about, muhaha!